Thursday, December 10, 2009
Stream of Consciousness: River
The leaves flutter as the wind picks up on a falls day. The delicut water rushes under my feet as the fih feed and the minows await. There's much wildlife and some very bright fish sit in the rocks at the bottom. A bobber bobs in the water with a kid on one end, and a worm and fish on the other. A lush forest surrounds with many animals and wildlife. The dense trees flutter in the wind while the water trickles down the rocky river.
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That was great! I really like the vocabulary in it. You might want to check spelling during profreading, though. But besides that, I really liked it!
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ReplyDeleteYou have a very descriptive voice! There was a few spelling errors, and some of the vocabulary could be strenghthend, but this was really good!
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ReplyDeleteYou have a very good description of your surroundings. It was really good!!
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